Monday, July 11, 2011

Is this paragraph descriptive enough to see this scene inside of your mind?

well not the exact scene. I know he was put into the ambulance. Maybe add a bit of the scenery in it, but if that's not what you're going for then i think it's fine as it is. Not great but fine. Q: was it night or day? metaphors for looming darkness and of what is it come as he is described being put into the ambulance??? just a thought.

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